Project SVN Completed
Yay, after 3 long weeks the project is finally done. A normal person could have actually done it in 5 hours but you know, I have other stuff to take care of. Anyway, here it is, the product of my boredom and false belief that I’m an anime artist lol. So some stat about the VN: it has 2526 words and about 149 screens of dialogue. I used about 15 BG images, 2 sprites, 5 BGM, and 5 SFX. Of course full credits were given to my resources. It was a wonderful experience for me. I used to just leech around for free VNs (I still do) and now I’ve finally made my own.
It isn’t perfect though, half-baked you may call it, but I think the structure is already there. I’ve realized that I’ve focused more on the technical stuff of the VN. While it is equally important, I think I neglected the very backbone of the VN which is the story. I think my story is still too weak. Thanks to my editor, I was able make it a bit readable. Then again this is my first time so I hope that excuses me lol.
PS. I already sent copies to Coeli, AS, Lanie-emon, & Setsuna-san who all requested a copy earlier.
Edit 3/3/08:
I’m now providing direct links to the SVN thanks to Pytom’s encouragement & support. For those who do not know, Pytom is the creator of the famous Renpy VN engine. Thanks for tips!^^ So sorry for all the hassle, I didn’t expect that visitors other than the regular commentators on this blog would really be interested in reading this. Anyway here it is, happy reading. Feel free to post your comments ad suggestions ^^
Versions:
*a minor bug: there’s a portion where the text window expands if the text is too large. Pytom recommended a short script to fix it but it is not yet included in this version.
Some Comments:
AS said: I finished the game, pretty interesting and something we otaku can relate to for the main character K ^^. The only thing that I would change is being able to pick the main characters name, but I assume that you will work on it and just made it K to make it easier for you while you finish the game. Interesting twist and good sound effects ^^. Send me more when you get more done lol ^^
Shin said: Just finished playing it. You already pointed out the weaknesses yourself, so I’m not going go there. Other than that, good selection of SFX and BGM. Loved the transition between each scene, as it gave the story a proper flow ^^xxx
Reviews of the SVN are available on these blogs:
39 Comments, Comment or Ping
Ashleigh
I’d love to check it out (I’m on windows).
Feb 27th, 2008
Hinano
Can we get some screenshots?? XD
Feb 27th, 2008
shinji
Ashleigh, sent you an email ^^
Hinano, I have one screenshot in my previous post, hope that’s enough for a preview ^^
Feb 27th, 2008
Setsuna-san
alright!! will play trough it and give you a feedback ASAP. thx for the copy.^^
Feb 27th, 2008
AS
Lol, I don’t mind ^^. Just send me over the next part of the game when you get done and I can give you another review ^^.
Feb 28th, 2008
Shin
Where is mineeeeeeeeee?! ヽ(；´Д｀)ノ
Feb 28th, 2008
shinji
Check ur email now shin ^_^
Feb 28th, 2008
dT
Oooh, I want a copy too! XD (Windows Vista)
Feb 28th, 2008
shinji
Check ur email dT ^^
Feb 28th, 2008
Shin
Just finished playing it. You already pointed out the weaknesses yourself, so I’m not going go there. Other than that, good selection of SFX and BGM. Loved the transition between each scene, as it gave the story a proper flow ^^ Did you do the character designs yourself? If so, great work with that. I especially liked that closeup shot of the heroine. For some reason she reminded me of Aiko from True Tears lawl. Story side, it’s a little short, so I’m expecting more content from you to make up for it ¯\(º_o)/¯
tl;dr
Excellent work!
Feb 28th, 2008
Impz
I just sent an email =/. Hopefully I will get it soon. It’s really rare to see someone who does such VN and the likes. I will definitely make a post for this =/
Feb 28th, 2008
shinji
Shin, thanks a lot I’m glad you liked some aspects of the VN. Except for the story, all the materials came from free resources, they’re all listed in the end-credits. Yes I love that closeup shot, it was really perfect for that scene. BCS of Lemmasoft forums made that ^^
Impz, you can check your email now, happy reading ^^
Feb 28th, 2008
Junix
shinji.. send me a copy too.. I wanna play too ^__^
Feb 29th, 2008
pucca
nice work honey! mwah. for everyone’s info, K was based on an actual person… hmmm.. I wonder who could he be? hehehe.. well anyway, the characters (and also the plot) were inspired more or less by the characters you’ll find in Haruki Murakami’s books…. shinji’s favorite author.
Feb 29th, 2008
Setsuna-san
im planning to put a review of it on my blog later you do you approve?
Feb 29th, 2008
shinji
Junix, sent you email ^^
Setsuna-san, yes it’s ok that would be an honor, thanks ^^
By the way pucca above (my girlfriend^^) was my editor, she helped me out a lot in making the VN. Big big thanks hon^^
Feb 29th, 2008
korosora
send me a copy too! :3
Feb 29th, 2008
Leviathan
Hi can you send me the link please? I’m using windows
Feb 29th, 2008
PyTom
Any chance I could get a copy of the Linux version?
Feb 29th, 2008
Setsuna-san
review is up now shinji along with some of my opinions.
Feb 29th, 2008
Licky
if you can could you send the link to me too please? thanks ^^
Mar 1st, 2008
Licky
sorry for double comment forgot to write my system, its window
Mar 1st, 2008
akinari42
Could you please send me a copy for mac? ^-^
Mar 1st, 2008
Jalin
Hey~
can i try this out too please? ^_^
i run windows XP
Mar 1st, 2008
Random Otaku
Hi,
I would like to review/tell about your piece of work on my blog. Can you please send me a download link? I’m sure at least a few people here in Israel would like to check it out.
Mar 2nd, 2008
hazy
I’d love to try this one out too! I’m on Windows. Thanks a bunch! =)
Mar 2nd, 2008
deltazechs
I would like to give this game a try! I am running windows and thanks! I will look forward to it!
Mar 2nd, 2008
shinji
guys you may now use the DL links above, happy reading ^^
Mar 3rd, 2008
lanie-emon
Congrats on finishing this project. I’ve play it and I reckon it can be improves. But for a first time project it sure was awesome ^^. I really like the story and I can somewhat relate to the main character. Osana Najimi is made out of FTW, lol.
Mar 3rd, 2008
D_Blade
Tried your work and I liked it. Since you needed some ideas/suggestions, etc. for a possible next chapter, I could help (sadly now would be a trifle difficult, given the pile of assignments I got to finish), so feel free to contact me (or via AS, whom I know rather well now).
At any rate, keep it up!
Mar 4th, 2008
shinji
lanie-emon, lol, thanks a lot!^^
D_Blade, thanks too, yup I’m busy w/ work myself so the sequel or new projects would have to wait hehe
Mar 4th, 2008
coeli
Project’s almost done, shini!! I can read it sooooooon!
Mar 5th, 2008
Choo
woah sweet!! gonna try your game soon. and nice site. I changed your link already. =)
Mar 5th, 2008
shinji
Coeli & Choo, hehe take your time guys & tell me what you think hehe thanks
Mar 5th, 2008
hazy
I was finally able to read it. It was kinda my first time with a visual novel thing, um, so my feedback would probably not be of much help. LOL.
It was really nice. Pretty basic storyline, but coherent and easy to follow along. The words you used were easy to understand as well and I found the font size and type convenient to read (not too small, not too large either). It needed a wee bit more editing but that errors were just minor. I really liked the details of the drawings/art, especially the room. The BGMs and sounds were well done. Nice character design (little Hisa was really cute!). I especially liked the last part with the train. Though it was short, I enjoyed reading it. Overall, I thought it was well done and you did a really good job! =)
I hope what I said made sense. Haha. I’m looking forward to reading more, if you decide to continue it. Thanks for sharing your project! ^_^
Mar 8th, 2008
hazy
Sorry for double posting… My previous post needed editing as well! LOL. Should be *error was* instead. xD
Mar 8th, 2008
Natirips
What a dreadfull story (I’m refering to version 1.0)… XD. The ending felt almost as if she would jump under the train X__X. The rest of the story was quite nice though…. Good work
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P.S.: How come little Hisa and older Hisa have different hair and eye colors XD
P.P.S.:Yes, I have no life so I noticed it…
Mar 10th, 2008
shinji
hazy, you’re welcome and thanks for your wonderful comments ^^
Natirips, thanks for the compliments. I used character graphics from two different free sources so they don’t really look alike hehe. Let’s just pretend that Hisa had a make-over hehe^^
Mar 10th, 2008
gego
em the ld-links for the GNU/Linux version does not work :S
only the windows one does…
Jul 21st, 2008
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